Well, considering Applejack wanting something back for being Rarity's slave (in short, the last panel), it would work better without the "A kiss!" speech bubble, like muted. But the story was good (wait, what story????)
That's it? "A kiss"? Rarity LASHED the crap outta AJ, leaving VISIBLE scars for the whole town to see, and even after that humiliation, all she want's is a "kiss"? Pardon me for saying so, but I think you have AJ not valuing herself very highly in this comic.
If I were AJ I would want: 1. full medical coverage for damages to your 'slave' 2. payment for the cosmetic surgery to cover up the scars 3. an orgy where AJ gets to RAM the poop back up Rarity's stuck-up butt. And if Rarity refused I wouldn't cooperate with her. In fact I might even go to the police and reveal that I had been raped and beaten by Rarity. AJ can and should take FULL advantage of this situation.
Bottom line: AJ let a golden opportunity slip away.
Maybe AJ just wanted to let Rarity think that this is the only thing she wants.....and at the next Apple Family Reunion...well....somethings gonna raise for sure, not the barn maybe, but something else ^^